The writers of well-constructed essays (8s and 9s) completely answer the prompt using evidence and explaining the relevance of the evidence. With a convincing thesis, the writer demonstrates a clear understanding of the task and the piece(s) being analyzed. These essays reflect the writer's ability to control a wide range of the elements of effective writing to provide a keen analysis of the literary text.
"A Modern Fight to the Death" earned a score of 6 because it does not specifically or correctly explain why "the diction is good." It does not draw its analogy created in its thesis throughout the essay. The title is a cliche and does not connect with the essay. It over uses pronouns, which causes confusion in understanding for the reader. Many sentences begin with the word "the." It seems to have difficulty making a point. It is very general. The writer's diction is inaccurate and the vocabulary is limited. Very little elaboration is provided for explanations/ support of ideas. Too much listing without enough explaining.
"Question 2, TT" is a 1 for all the obvious reasons.
"Question 2, JJ" is a 3.
"Crime and Punishment" is a 3 because it is very general and provides very little specific detail/explanation, and does not draw directly from the analyzed text. The essay does not contain a thesis.
"Title?" is a 5.
"Q.2, S1" is a very well written essay that earns an 8 because it includes cliches, which a 9 will never do. It also uses allusions that are irrelevant. Relevant allusions are good; irrelevant ones are bad. This essay refers to the text it analyses as a "story." Nines will refer to these types of texts as "narratives."
"Why Imperfection is the Answer" is a 9. It analyzes tone using correct terminology.
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